markgilchrist

This has promise, but I cannot go any further. There are too many major mistakes that could have been sorted by proper proofreading - it looks like this has been proofread by "suggested spellings".
Thus we have "whence" instead of when - they don't mean the same thing; "conscious" confused with "conscience"; the man "shacking" fiercely; finally the gunshot liberating a "plumb" of debris did it. And this is in 7%, according to the Kindle.
I can't comment on the story. I couldn't finish it due to the annoyances, and the prospect of more